Top 5 Mistakes Writers Make With Plotting (According To A Script Reader)

Script Reader POV

Following on from his first post, script reader Allan is offering his POV on common mistakes he’s discovered in the spec pile.

For me, it’s SO interesting to see the same old issues rear their heads, even in 2021. It’s almost like the foundations of writing craft are timeless! Over to you, Allan …

What I Learned From My First 300+ Scripts

Out of a sample of 435 scripts, these were some of the most common structural and plotting errors in scripts sent to Film Festivals in 2021. Ready? Let’s go …

1) Ending Act 1 At The Midpoint

Starting with the big one. Over 50% of the scripts I read this year are guilty of ending the first Act at or near the midpoint. Contrary to popular belief, the problem is NOT simply that Act 1 is “too long” or “breaks from convention”. (A long first Act can be very powerful and captivating). The problem is simply that it’s typically only at the end of Act 1 that the script offers its promises to the reader.

Act One provides us the status quo. What was. And ends with a twist that propels us into the rest of it, and promises the kind of story we’re going to read. If this promise is only offered only halfway through, then it automatically feels like there simply isn’t enough time to deliver on that promise.

How can you promise me an exciting murder-mystery-thriller if the murder, mystery and thrills only start an hour into the film? This is even more noticeable in TV pilots where there may only a handful of pages left to tell the entire plot. Again, it can be done. Just look at From Dusk Till Dawn but it often leads to other problems, such as…

2) Cliffhanger Endings

This is a particular pet peeve for many readers. Cliffhanger endings are not a substitute for an actual ending. A satisfying ending is one that brings closure, and a good cliffhanger upends that closure. Catharsis, then twist!

A bad cliffhanger is one used instead of giving us closure … only twist, no resolution.

And if it’s because the writer couldn’t fit in a proper third Act, well, let’s just say we notice. Denying us an ending – even an unsatisfying one – is really not doing you any favours.

3) Talking Directly To The Reader

While often this is fairly harmless, and may even be a part of the writer’s style, it can have substantial issues. The biggest issue is that it sometimes hides problems from the writer. Writers often describe their characters using “invisible” character traits – ie. traits the camera can’t see – or tell us details about the character that never make it into the film. If we never see the detail in film, then it’s not actually in the film.

However, by telling the reader in description, writers often think they’ve told the audience too. I’ve read scripts where …

  • Character names are only in the description and never in the dialogue
  • Where major character arcs and emotions are told in italicised thought bubbles (not even to the camera or voiceovers) or
  • Characters and entire scenes are described exclusively in metaphors, ie. “gunfire erupting like a shower of fireworks”. This is evocative, but if there’s only one gun in the entire scene or if it’s unclear who is doing the shooting for three pages how can we imagine this? A script should always primarily focus on what can be seen by the camera, nothing else.

More, after the pic.

#RepresentationMatters

However, one area where this is a major issue is in matters of representation. A good number of scripts I read this year had trans characters, Jewish characters, bisexual characters and a plethora of marginalised groups. In fact over a third of the scripts I read sported at least one queer or minority religion character as a main character. Whilst this sounds great,  MOST of those characters were wholly invisible. It was present in …

If I, the reader, get to know that a character is trans, then so should the audience. However, if the audience never learns this information, then regardless of what the writer’s inner story says, I the reader should not know either.

This doesn’t mean these details have to be plot critical. However if the character’s religion, ethnicity or sexuality is invisible or has no impact on the story, then ask yourself why are you telling this to the reader?

While writers may feel that adding an officially “gay” or “trans” or “marginalised” character into their script helps them, what it actually does is lean into …

4) …The Heteronormative White Male Default (And The Importance Of Visual Details)

Consider the following example …

SAM (30), bold and outrageously dressed, waves at CASEY (20s, black), a shy, gay man who timidly waves back in return.

Can you see how these characters are being treated differently?

If not, consider this …

  • Is Sam a male or a female?
  • Are they white or something else?
  • What is Sam’s sexual orientation?
  • Aside from skin colour, what does Casey actually look like?

A lot of writers are very careful to point out when a character is “black”, or “trans” or “gay” or “half-Asian”, but don’t ever mention that a different character is “white” or “straight” … Even though sometimes later in the script their specific skin colour or sexuality is pivotal to the story.

Also what do descriptors like “Half-Asian” mean exactly? Italian? Arabic? Ethiopian? Korean and Australian? Why do we never see Half-White instead?

Fortunately this year there were almost no examples of women being described exclusively by their sex appeal (I checked), but the heteronormative white male default was a constant.

5) Show Don’t Tell (Read Your Script Without The Character Introduction)

Okay, yes, I know, at first glance this looks like I’m rehashing the above two points but it’s actually quite different. While the above two examples are dominantly focused on the introduction, this one is more focused on the script as a whole.

For example, meet RACHEL. Throughout the script she is strong, assertive, efficient, dressed sharply, educated, locates problems, realises the solutions and puts herself on the line to fix it. She is a powerful woman and a great role model.

But what we are “told” in her introduction is her name, age and that she is “shy” and a “prototypical disaster millennial”.

What???

This is not the character we are shown at all. Remember, you’re writing for a visual and auditory medium, and what we “see” and what we “hear” is far more important than what we’re told.

The solution to this one, however is fairly easy. Next time you read a script, skip over the character’s introduction, read the story, then jump back and see if the image in your head matches the one on the page. If it’s different, maybe you need to rewrite that introduction! MORE: How To Introduce A Character In A Screenplay

Thanks Allan!

BIO: Allan is an ex-historian turned reader and writer, with a penchant for analysis, world building, disability rights and education. And a complete nerd to boot.

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4 thoughts on “Top 5 Mistakes Writers Make With Plotting (According To A Script Reader)”

  1. #4 is one of those recurring bits-of-advice I see on this site which goes into a private little mental cabinet of mine where I store things only fit for shaking-my-head-at.

    It’s another “doozy from Loozy”. That cabinet now holds five or six absurdities as creeping political correctness threatens to overwhelm practical, pragmatic, good sense.

    Eh, who knows? Maybe I read the item incorrectly. But as I currently grasp it, #4 is telling me to write screenplays without any subtle acknowledgement of white western civilization. Avoid any subconscious association with white western education, white western literature, because white western history is too-overtly male, too-imperialist and too-patriarchical?

    I understand the point about ‘consistent’ character introductions but the broader implications afoot here are bogus and silly.

    As ugly as the concept of, “heteronormative white male default” happens to be to today’s hiding-behind-a-Gateway-personal-computer rabble-rousers …Greeks and Romans, Germans and Britons, Italians and Spanish, French and Norwegians happen to be the builders of the world we live in. Our literature, our music, our architecture, our cinema.

    I’m a product of that civilization, and that is the tradition I write towards. I’m not about to change a word. I’ll continue to admire Cervantes, Dickens, Shakespeare, Milton, Dante and anyone else who is actually worth a damn.

    This whingeing Simon-Says plague of, “please everyone let’s all get in step now, please everyone we must properly mince our words for the sake of our guests” is killing everything.

    I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again: keep political agendas out of writing.

    1. Dude, this is like your sixth recent comment railing against B2W’s ‘wokism’. You’re clearly obsessed with me. This is getting embarrassing for you, especially as you have demonstrated YET AGAIN you don’t understand the point being made. You even know that deep down, hence your ‘eh, who knows? Maybe I read the item incorrectly’. But thanks, because your fragility on this subject given me so much material to break down here for a new blog post. Result!

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